I see you near me
I imagined us always
ageing together
walking, tears smear my glasses
I dance alone now you’re gone
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This was written in response to Write Anything's Form and Genre Challenge , Tanka style
From my reading too, I believe they normally don't give them a title - thus no title on mine.
I'd call it - "Mortem Viits"... "Death Visits"...I love the way Latin sounds.
These poems are frequently about love, seasons, sadness, with strong images and poetic devices haiku avoids. 5 lines, with lines 1 and 3 being shorter.
Syllables per line are 5-7-5-7-7 respectively. -- defintion from "Poet's Market, 1998"
From my reading too, I believe they normally don't give them a title - thus no title on mine.
I'd call it - "Mortem Viits"... "Death Visits"...I love the way Latin sounds.
6 comments:
This almost made me cry. Well felt and well done, Annie!
Heartbreak. Is there any stronger emotion? Perhaps only love.
thanks Kate and Storm! I appreciate your feedback. was so much more that I wanted to put in there.. but words.. syllables so precious.
Very sad. Beautifully written.
Oh! Wonderful! The images of a couple aging together and your final line-- "I dance alone now you’re gone"--are impactful!
Very moving and evocative.
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