Thursday, February 24, 2011

Impossible Bumble Bee

The prompt  over at Write Anything this week   

Bumble bees are one of natures Anomalies

It was posted here in first draft, but has been pulled off line to polish to enter into a competition. Wish me luck


Story inspired by the [Fiction Friday] prompt at Write Anything  and submitted to JM Strother’s #FridayFlash via Twitter.


John Wiswell said...

A sort of sweetness emerges between the two of them. The bees are nice lead-in to what they reveal for each other.

minor typo, paragraph four: apostrophe missing from "Gods"

AidanF said...

This captures the sadness of the ghosts. I enjoyed the opening mystery behind Zane.

Anonymous said...

It took me a bit to catch on Kari wa a ghost. Protrays his regret and remorse well, without going into too much detail. Leaves the reader wanting more.

J. M. Strother said...

This was both sweet and sad. I was about half way through before I caught on. I think you captured the slow healing process that follows a sudden loss like that really well. All three characters in this come off really well.