It was posted here in first draft, but has been pulled off line to polish to enter into a competition. Wish me luck
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Story inspired by the [Fiction Friday] prompt at Write Anything and submitted to JM Strother’s #FridayFlash via Twitter.
4 comments:
A sort of sweetness emerges between the two of them. The bees are nice lead-in to what they reveal for each other.
minor typo, paragraph four: apostrophe missing from "Gods"
This captures the sadness of the ghosts. I enjoyed the opening mystery behind Zane.
It took me a bit to catch on Kari wa a ghost. Protrays his regret and remorse well, without going into too much detail. Leaves the reader wanting more.
This was both sweet and sad. I was about half way through before I caught on. I think you captured the slow healing process that follows a sudden loss like that really well. All three characters in this come off really well.
~jon
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