Friday, July 30, 2010

Grandads Attic

This story has been removed for further editing and refining.. Hopefully it will be submitted to competitions and perhaps an Anthology...


thanks for popping by when it WAS up.. and leaving your comments




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Story inspired by the [Fiction Friday] prompt at Write Anything and submitted to JM Strother’s #FridayFlash  via Twitter - as well as to Amnars Pictorial Prompt and to   Writing Adventure Group.

Prompt - A covert trip into an attic reveals something unexpected.

12 comments:

anastasia_wolf said...

Hehehe please tell me that was granddad's erm... protector? ;)

Walt said...

“Neesha, he was going to die anyway. Only a matter of time. Any one of us would have done it.” I enjoyed the story but that line really grabbed my attention.

Well done

Annie said...

yeah... Anastasia... it was.... ha ha...

and yes Walt.. evil little money grabbing buggers.....

Tiffany Herr said...

Your conversation sounds so natural. I fell right into the scene with your great description. I felt like a fly on the wall watching and listening. Really an enjoyable read. Thanks!

Adam Byatt said...

Where there's a will, I want to be in it.
Great dialogue as always. Greed will always make people do the strangest things.
Adam B

Laura Rachel Fox said...

I absolutely love the opening paragraph. A beautiful description that not only gives the reader a setting, but also speaks to the mood of the characters.

Leaving the manner of Gran's death open to interpretation was a wonderful idea. I love it when writers let me use my own imagination.

Great work.

Icy Sedgwick said...

I'm so glad that such horrible individuals got nothing! Oh, they're a right pair, aren't they? You really made me dislike them! Sign of good characterisation.

John Pender said...

Oh, Lord. I have relatives exactly like this. Great story, Annie. The dialogue flowed very smoothly and naturally.

keiths ramblings said...

Totally irreverant and utterly delightful! A joy to read.

Shelli said...

It reminded me of the scene in "A Christmas Carol" where the townspeople are going through Scrooge's belongings after he dies. And I just compared you to Dickens! Well done.

Jason Coggins said...

I absolutely loved this story Annie. No word of a lie the biggest pulling attraction to me relocating in Melbourne was to see a game or two at the MCG. I loves the good game you see. Your two characters are ignorant savages for whom stoning would be too good. That was so very ace, thank you!

Tomara Armstrong said...

Poor grandad... *shakes her head*. I hope someone else recovers a hidden stash of awesome.

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