Friday, July 23, 2010

Clandestine Tilak

This story has been removed to be polished and entered into competitions. Thanks for your encouragement!


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Story inspired by the [Fiction Friday] prompt at Write Anything and submitted to JM Strother’s #FridayFlash  via Twitter - as well as to  Writing Adventure Group.

Prompt -write the meeting of Two of Established Characters.

13 comments:

Jason Coggins said...

Wow, at the risk of sounding pretentious you always seem to capture the small intimate details that create an encounter and breathe life into it.

John Pender said...

Awesome, Annie.
I got the feeling I was sitting right there with her.

Laura Rachel Fox said...

A palpable picture. It is the small details that give the meeting a familiar feel. I too felt as if I was right along side the bride-to-be.

afullnessinbrevity said...

Exquisite detail that captured the nuances.
Adam B

Anonymous said...

This piece was loaded with detail. It was easy to visualize the scene as it unfolded.

I'm curious which stories these two characters came from?

Walt said...

Woops, that anonymous comment was me.

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This piece was loaded with detail. It was easy to visualize the scene as it unfolded.

I'm curious which stories these two characters came from?

Shelli said...

I enjoyed it very much. I love the setting, the chemistry between the two. Nicely done.

Scott said...

I was drawn into the scene immediately and surprised at the nature of the "transaction" that was taking place. Left me wanting to know more about their story.

Icy Sedgwick said...

Very descriptive, and I love your little asides, such as wondering what small hands mean. I think they'll be very happy together. Wonderful work!

keiths ramblings said...

I could really imagine myself there, the detail was awesome.Perfect.

anastasia_wolf said...

It took me a while to figure out what was going on! Hehe. Also want to know where they come from!

J. M. Strother said...

Well done, but it made me sad. I have a hard time wrapping my head around arranged marriages. I hope she does indeed find happiness.
~jon

Jen Brubacher said...

I can't see this in a romantic way. I think you've done a terrific job with the story and I believe you've left it open to interpretation, and my interpretation is I feel awful for her. Heh. Nicely done.