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Story initially inspired by the [Fiction Friday] prompt at Write Anything and submitted to JM Strother’s #FridayFlash via Twitter - as well as to the Writing Adventure Group.
Prompt - "I wish he’d knock on my door instead."
14 comments:
Are you happy now Annie, you made me tear up. Fab bit of writing, this. You should send it out. I love it.
Oh! This is beautifully written!!! I agree with Chris, you should send this out.
For real, Annie. Great work.
Lovely. I especially like the description of a typical morning in the kitchen. So sad.
This is was so wonderfully visual. The description was so apt in showing how isolated the character had become. Poignant.
Blessings
Adam
That was really enjoyable.
Great writing as usual. I could almost hear the steam screaming and smell the tea. This weeks prompt is turning out a lot of variety.
Mine: http://uncleteebooks.blogspot.com/2010/06/fiction-friday-june-11-2010.html
Wonderful!
Well told and easily visualized. Well done.
Potent piece here. I can seen this being something that shapes her for the rest of her life.
Spot on sketch.
Although she's devastated at being left behind, i wonder if the father has an inkling that she'd like to go. Very nice piece.
Beautiful. Particularly powerful in that it would seem the sib knew what it meant to her while the father was oblivious.
Nice job getting inside the child's head and taking us along.
I'm seeing the scene in my head as I read, and I recall something from my own childhood. Great piece that evokes lots of emotion.
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