Wednesday, June 9, 2010

Leather Tack and Tears

The First Draft of this story has been removed in order to edit it up and submit it. Wish me luck

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Story initially inspired by the [Fiction Friday] prompt at Write Anything and submitted to JM Strother’s #FridayFlash via Twitter - as well as to the  Writing Adventure Group.

Prompt - "I wish he’d knock on my door instead."

14 comments:

Chris Chartrand said...

Are you happy now Annie, you made me tear up. Fab bit of writing, this. You should send it out. I love it.

Icy Sedgwick said...

Oh! This is beautifully written!!! I agree with Chris, you should send this out.

John Pender said...

For real, Annie. Great work.

Laura Rachel Fox said...

Lovely. I especially like the description of a typical morning in the kitchen. So sad.

afullnessinbrevity said...

This is was so wonderfully visual. The description was so apt in showing how isolated the character had become. Poignant.
Blessings
Adam

newtowritinggirl said...

That was really enjoyable.

Uncle Tee said...

Great writing as usual. I could almost hear the steam screaming and smell the tea. This weeks prompt is turning out a lot of variety.

Mine: http://uncleteebooks.blogspot.com/2010/06/fiction-friday-june-11-2010.html

Kim Switzer said...

Wonderful!

Walt said...

Well told and easily visualized. Well done.

Tony Noland said...

Potent piece here. I can seen this being something that shapes her for the rest of her life.

Spot on sketch.

PJ said...

Although she's devastated at being left behind, i wonder if the father has an inkling that she'd like to go. Very nice piece.

Lauren Cude said...

Beautiful. Particularly powerful in that it would seem the sib knew what it meant to her while the father was oblivious.

Girl Fren' said...

Nice job getting inside the child's head and taking us along.

Vetta said...

I'm seeing the scene in my head as I read, and I recall something from my own childhood. Great piece that evokes lots of emotion.