As always, this is in first draft format.
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This story has been removed to be polished and submitted into competitions.. wish me luck!
This story has been removed to be polished and submitted into competitions.. wish me luck!
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This is a first draft.
Story inspired by the [Fiction Friday] prompt at Write Anything and submitted to JM Strother’s #FridayFlash via Twitter.
This story will be recorded and posted up for Spoken Sunday via Audio Boo
7 comments:
What a sad and moving twist. I liked it a lot. Very nicely done.
Well, I did not see that coming. I'm quite intrigued by the hint that he feels it his fault she died - "you paid the price." I imagine him being late to pick her up, and she was attacked while waiting for him? That certainly would be a load of guilt to live with.
~jon
Thanks Jon and Shelli!! a bit of a twist on the prompt from that week... I didn't want to do a soppy one..
Oh my, this is so sad and beautiful. I'm glad I checked the #SpokenSunday tag and found your story. I listened, touched by every word. Thank you so much for sharing.
I did not expect that ending. How sad, the weight of his words ring solid in his greif.
Wonderfully done.
Wow..
Masterful twist at the end, transforming him from a flaky boyfriend to a potentially tragic and remorseful mystery.
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