Saturday, February 16, 2008

Scars and Spiderwebs

Prompt: Tell of a characters scar.

This first draft has been removed as it has been chosen to be included in my 2008 Anthology and is under consideration for inclusion on a collaborative one with Jodi and Paul.

These will be available here - so do pop over!

3 comments:

Square1 said...

This was a well written and provocative piece. Having been through post partum depression I can understand her sentiments, though mine strayed to the other end of the spectrum. One suggestion I migh give, is to attach a bit of a warning for women who are going through Postpartum depression or OCD. A piece like this can be a severe trigger.

Just so you know, I sighed in relief when she sat down to the picnic at the end. PHEW!

Paul said...

A dark and disturbing piece, but the mood lifted by the hope at the end, that the bond between parent and child, and the innocent and guileless love shown by a child are enough to bring her back.

Jodi Cleghorn said...

This goes straight to the dark heart of motherhood. The feelings of imprisonment,loneliness and estrangement from Self, of being out of control but apparently 'in control'.

This made my blood run cold and my empathy run deep.

The imagery is sharp (no pun intended) and the alternation between the 'slick, slack' and splash pour was brilliant - the sounds of normalcy for each of the players in this story.

Is Monica sated now that her story has been told?