tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4900836079065859174.post8821707034857732166..comments2023-07-07T20:56:35.512+10:00Comments on Flash Fiction By Annie: Where Shall We Meet?Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01308937047474819914noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4900836079065859174.post-62715194603153363002009-08-04T22:07:57.672+10:002009-08-04T22:07:57.672+10:00I'm wondering if I've missed something bef...I'm wondering if I've missed something before the story started; legend, tradition or similar. I don't really fathom who the creatures at the beginning are. Maybe, that's my fault. <br /><br />I liked the way you paced your piece, peaking at Santa's arrival. And also the topical touch at the end. <br /><br />One mistake I found:<br />“<b>It's</b> true – people aren’t observing the old ways..."Paulhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08136225187552117043noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4900836079065859174.post-85230241022194361412009-08-01T08:03:06.003+10:002009-08-01T08:03:06.003+10:00As others have said, your dialogue was great. It ...As others have said, your dialogue was great. It set a nice atmosphere which fit well with the characters. A fun little ride.Chris Chartrandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09766438158698041660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4900836079065859174.post-49997696244630677852009-08-01T07:30:04.715+10:002009-08-01T07:30:04.715+10:00Great story. I really liked the way you only gave ...Great story. I really liked the way you only gave hints and let the readers work out themselves who was who.<br /><br />My fiction Friday story can be found at: http://innerdreamsblog.blogspot.com/2009/07/saints-revengef.htmlDark Angelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08783255071300292209noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4900836079065859174.post-71635431810219833702009-08-01T05:12:52.517+10:002009-08-01T05:12:52.517+10:00Hahaha, can't help thinking it's an allego...Hahaha, can't help thinking it's an allegory of a celebrity has-been trying to become popular again, with his staffs and manager. Great read! <br /><br />http://anandserpi.wordpress.com/2009/07/31/the-old-man-with-the-long-white-beard/Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4900836079065859174.post-78186605574433590232009-07-31T22:32:49.533+10:002009-07-31T22:32:49.533+10:00Nice Job. I too liked the dialogue. Great descript...Nice Job. I too liked the dialogue. Great description and an interesting take on the challenge...it had an old world feel to me.<br /><br />Mine:<br />http://uncleteebooks.blogspot.com/2009/07/fiction-friday-july-31-2009.htmlUncle Teehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02566469545552643903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4900836079065859174.post-90753426519604429542009-07-31T21:21:16.903+10:002009-07-31T21:21:16.903+10:00What an interesting read! Very good descriptive d...What an interesting read! Very good descriptive dialogue and enjoyed how the plot flowed like Santa's sleigh.Billhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02105333544917808423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4900836079065859174.post-3991292752895006582009-07-31T18:47:30.224+10:002009-07-31T18:47:30.224+10:00I really enjoyed your description of "the gre...I really enjoyed your description of "the green man." I also like how you use dialogue to move the story forward quickly.Ronda Levinehttp://writingresearchediting.com/blog.phpnoreply@blogger.com