tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4900836079065859174.post594696816888136733..comments2023-07-07T20:56:35.512+10:00Comments on Flash Fiction By Annie: The VoiceAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01308937047474819914noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4900836079065859174.post-4440268411034158102008-05-10T13:55:00.000+10:002008-05-10T13:55:00.000+10:00Wow Annie, these are incredible images. I love th...Wow Annie, these are incredible images. I love the sounds "crunch, crackle" and the visualization of popcorn and cool mists. I was actually tapping into your character's empowerment as you closed with "I am the voice". Inspiring!ChefDruckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01581859830585809291noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4900836079065859174.post-67399348352178253112008-05-10T02:01:00.000+10:002008-05-10T02:01:00.000+10:00I LOVE your description of something soft and cush...I LOVE your description of something soft and cushiony being like popcorn. That is such an amazing visual and works perfectly.<BR/><BR/>I would steer clear of using "has been" or "had been" as it removes the strength of the verbs.<BR/><BR/>"I had been cold a few moments ago"<BR/>VS<BR/>"I was cold a few moments ago"<BR/><BR/>Just comes out more confident =)Tricksy Pixiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14304480426260118977noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4900836079065859174.post-89249794694181913812008-05-09T22:40:00.000+10:002008-05-09T22:40:00.000+10:00This is really powerful writing Annie ... I'm ther...This is really powerful writing Annie ... I'm there, Im wiggling my toes and my feet ... I'm wondering if I would have it in me to stride across the white hot coals.<BR/><BR/>Congrats on a really wonderful piece.Jodi Cleghornhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00808676742258881407noreply@blogger.com