tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4900836079065859174.post2764537097525337237..comments2023-07-07T20:56:35.512+10:00Comments on Flash Fiction By Annie: Dark Age of Enlightenment FGC (2012) #8Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01308937047474819914noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4900836079065859174.post-85421680742902555612012-04-06T08:23:10.518+10:002012-04-06T08:23:10.518+10:00A wonderful, engaging story, Annie :) I really enj...A wonderful, engaging story, Annie :) I really enjoyed reading it.Emma Venableshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11868022839326032564noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4900836079065859174.post-22640127819720771522012-04-04T10:13:24.277+10:002012-04-04T10:13:24.277+10:00There were some fascinating details in your writin...There were some fascinating details in your writing! I couldn't believe that you haven't written in the time period before! The rituals, the repeated words... very well done!<br /><br />I especially enjoyed the Captain's tale and how he trusted in the "Rromani" (or Romani? You spell in both ways) to save his wife and saved the man and his family in the end.<br /><br />I would offer some constructive criticism, as you say it is okay! There were a lot of little grammar and punctuation mistakes, especially around the dialogue - sometimes it was hard to follow! If you are interested, I'd be happy to do an edit of a word version of the post. The narration was so fun, your characters are so lovely, that I disliked being taken out of the story!!<br /><br />The way you cut the two timelines together was very nice - lent a hint of mystery to the piece. <br /><br />Overall, it was a GREAT story... I hope that you continue it!!Barbara @ de rebushttp://www.derebus.netnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4900836079065859174.post-54701070322671883972012-04-04T04:00:58.306+10:002012-04-04T04:00:58.306+10:00I enjoyed reading this. I love the chracter of Mar...I enjoyed reading this. I love the chracter of Margorina. :)Becky Fyfehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01595020500346331076noreply@blogger.com